- Producer09/11/2016The Downward Search for NuanceLooking down on it, as I so often do, the room seems alive. A bit dark, but that's only because the man who lives there has went out to get dinner and has shut all the windows and doors, save mine, so as to guard against burglary. Normally it is...
Comments10/11/2016 #30 🐝 Fatima Williams#16 Thank you Deb I should say your attention to detail is spectacular. And its proven with this buzz you quote "Where what unfolds is tidy and planned and deeply full of meaning." It's up to us to unfold the meaning that opens up a different world than what we are accustomed to.10/11/2016 #28 Deb 🐝 Helfrich#27 Electric is a good word for the feeling when those first few words auto-translate in your brain? I've never studied Spanish. I just went to Madrid based on a friend, worked in an International Development Bank where 90% of the work going on around me was in Spanish, and now I copy and paste buzzes and increase my vocab daily....10/11/2016 #27 jesse kaellis#26
I've never been anywhere Deb. Just the USA and Canada. Going to Mexico will be my first time in a country where the native tongue is not English. I was taking Spanish lessons when I lived in LA, for a little while. I lived in a Hispanic neighborhood. I walked by an alley where kids were playing in the back of a house. One kid -- "Perro!" Dog. I was electrified, illuminated. A jumble of Spanish and a word came through. I'm committed to learning Spanish when I get back. Finally. I like the language.10/11/2016 #26 Deb 🐝 Helfrich#24 #25 An intricate non-American....those words really make me smile! In both France and Spain, on my first trip out of the country, I was comically thought to be Irish on a few occasions... the red hair does tend to create the illusion, but I am quite proud to not sound like an American when it comes to an openness of mind and willingness to observe how to be as local as feasible....and lately the Hondurans and Brazilians have also been a bit confused as to my origins since I wield a great copy and paste!
It's all down to books - to reading giving me the gift of being a citizen of the world.09/11/2016 #22 jesse kaellisI like this, Deb. "I decided it needed a name besides 'there,' so I started calling it home." That's a surprise that grounds the reader.
From my interview: "I’m looking for that payoff, and it could be one sentence or even a word."
See the genius there, Deb? It can be something simple, the right word in the right place.09/11/2016 #20 Deb 🐝 Helfrich#18 Timing! Ohhh, I dwell in that saying. Most especially because I was trying to highlight the life that occurs in the process of a painting on a wall or a book on a shelf or a career in the making. But then certain works transcend their own time... life is so many things all at the same time.09/11/2016 #18 Laura Mikolaitis#7 @Deb 🐝 Helfrich, thank you for the mention and your kind words. They say that timing is everything so I am glad that my most recent pieces evoked emotion in you; and brought you here with this beautiful piece of artistry. The imagery and narration is captivating and you transport the reader to another place in time. There's magic in selecting just the right colors for your palette and then mixing them together to bring a canvas to life. The richness of the pigment - and sometimes the dullness of it - can combine together to create something completely different than the artist may have intended. That's the beauty in pigments, and in life, the mediums that we can add to it to create a tapestry that we come to know as life. Thank you, Deb. This piece brought me to a special place today. One that was much needed.09/11/2016 #16 Deb 🐝 Helfrich#13 It is incredible to hear, @🐝 Fatima Williams, that I was able to transport you to another time in your life. Most of us have had those transitions where we felt an outsider, a watcher and not a participator. And in my case, being a spectator invokes that sense of being in the cheap seats watching a magnificent performance spread out below, where what unfolds is tidy and planned and deeply full of meaning.09/11/2016 #13 🐝 Fatima WilliamsI second Irene's comment This is almost a masterpiece. I felt like the girl in the balcony and I was transported to another time in my life. Thank you @Deb 🐝 Helfrich Keep them coming . I need to reread this again These memories we have are treasures and we all have something to learn from every place that created the memory.
- 09/01/2017I'm considering expanding upon my fictional series into a book but am indecisive about a title. Would love some suggestions!
Comments09/01/2017 #11 Devesh BhattDon't know what tribes resided in your area, or the tribe of the protagonist, it requires study to know which names the real tribes would accept cause tribes fight each other...It's the same everywhere :)
Google certainly helps...Googled native American girl warrior names
One is a Navajo name
Altsoba ...Meaning all are at war.
Good name, good keyword, makes people curious about history too...But it should not be a mismatch.
There are many online.
- Producer13/11/2016The Beginning - the Final EpisodeWelcome to the continuing fictional saga about the life of a young female Indian warrior. This is the final episode and I hope you have enjoyed this fictional series. As I have written at the beginning of each episode: We are each our history and...
Comments15/11/2016 #24 Pamela 🐝 WilliamsThanks one of my very nice writers😊! I'm so glad you like the story. It's been a both fun and challenging! @Paul Walters was the other one! What is it with me and Pauls lately! @Paul "Pablo" Croubalian has been such an inspiration to me for social media and now you two writing rock stars IMHO! #2315/11/2016 #23 Paul KemnerWow- this series is an excellent first fiction! Writing serial stories seems to be a great way to get started- you get feedback and encouragement as you go along, and it's a lot easier to get someone to try a short chapter instead of something that will take weeks to read.
I agree with you that the female warrior and high-elder words would be the ones to keep- they describe important characters. You're using them frequently, so we get a chance to learn them.15/11/2016 #22 Pamela 🐝 Williams#21 I always thought I would love to get an actual Passamaquody tribal member to teach me how to say the words. On the site where I found the words there are pronunciations available, but even still they are extremely difficult to verbalize. You never know exactly how they sound things out. Like German. I sometimes find myself reverting to German pronunciations of certain words that I can tell are of German origin. No I don't speak German but I took so many German grammar classes the pronunciations come easily if the vocabulary does not.!!15/11/2016 #21 Deb 🐝 Helfrich#20 That's one of those things that someone will either love or hate. I thought it brought so much of the world alive, and you used the parentheses at just the right time. But for a larger audience, I can see it being a stumbling block...there has to be a both/and situation of using the words as enrichment while keeping the readers in the flow of the story. Audio comes to mind..... a short clip of how to say the words might help the sounders-outers in the crowd, for instance.15/11/2016 #20 Pamela 🐝 Williams#19 If I do a rewrite and expand the story I've decided, with the help of some very nice writers whom I turned to for advice, to simplify the use of the words, but there are some I'll keep just because I liked them! Like the word for the high elder and the female warrior. They seemed add 'punch' to the characters. and roles.15/11/2016 #19 Deb 🐝 Helfrich#15 I did want to report back that I both am glad I binge read the first 9 installments, because it really built a world for me, but that my initial reason, to be able to follow the complex use of names, turned out to not be an issue. You did a great job in keeping the flow of all the new terms easy to remember without the reader needing to generate their own cliff notes.15/11/2016 #17 Pamela 🐝 Williams#12 Well I sent you on a roller coaster ride of emotions on this journey @Donna-Luisa Eversley, I'm so glad it ended with a happy sigh for you. So, how are you feeling about Running Deer now? Go ahead, admit it, maybe we all have the potential to be a bit mean when our heart is broken. We're human, all of us, we all say and do things we wish we could take back. It's about finding the strength to move on, just one step forward.15/11/2016 #16 Pamela 🐝 Williams#14 I thought hard about the ending, even as I was writing the other chapters. I wanted it to end realistically; we all suffer losses and sometimes sacrifices have to be made to move forward in life. As I wrote in my reply to Franci; it ended with hope and dreams for the future. You've been a wonderful fan Fatima! thank you for that, my readers gave me the courage to finish the story.14/11/2016 #14 🐝 Fatima WilliamsOMG @Pamela 🐝 Williams I love the ending and it's a perfect end for this drama. I would have loved for them to have met to rekindle the love they had, which was blinded by guilt and revenge nevertheless I love it. Thank you so much for giving us such an entertaining engrossing story that connects to each one of us at a different level.
I am your fan and then your sister. I've loved fiction since I knew how to read and this is going to the grave with me. An absolute entertainer. 🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗 High five ✋✋✋✋✋✋14/11/2016 #11 Deb 🐝 HelfrichWow, as far as I am concerned, it is the happiest of endings. Some times we just don't fit somewhere and we would fit perfectly somewhere else. Especially when someone with a very prominent role seems against us.
This was a gift, @Pamela 🐝 Williams View moreWow, as far as I am concerned, it is the happiest of endings. Some times we just don't fit somewhere and we would fit perfectly somewhere else. Especially when someone with a very prominent role seems against us.
This was a gift, @Pamela 🐝 Williams Really and truly a fantastic piece of art. Close13/11/2016 #7 Lisa 🐝 Gallagher#6 I think I understand your mushy self a bit! Remember, dont lose hope . Its easy to let go of hope when things feel as though they are crumbling around us, thats when we need others as reminders or 'pick me uppers'.. no not drugs (referring to my phrase, uppers') lol, just ways to uplift our spirits!13/11/2016 #6 Pamela 🐝 Williams#4 I'm going to show my mushy self again and admit that I was sitting in my favorite coffee shop downtown and cried as I wrote the last few paragraphs of this story. Whether they were tears of happiness that Kisuhs Nicanol and Running Deer found peace or tears of sadness because she had to leave all that she knew is still a question I'm asking myself. What I liked most about the ending was that the high elder, a true leader, was willing to make the sacrifice of banishing his wife if Kisuhs Nicanol chose to stay, that he also realized that if the young warrior was to live life to the fullest she had to make the decision to simply live. As I told you on the phone; I don't understand where this story came from, or why I was driven to write it, but I know it wasn't mine. Live in Peace and Hope my friend.13/11/2016 #5 Pamela 🐝 Williams#3 As I told Deb in a comment; not what I would call a 'happy ending' but the best ending that could occur. Sometimes sacrifices have to be made for the betterment of everyone. She now has family and hope, and in the end, isn't that what matters? That after all the trials and tribulations that we all suffer, that there is in the end; hope?
- Producer23/10/2016The Shifting Tide - Episode 9Welcome to the continuing fictional saga about the life of a young female Indian warrior. This is the next to the last episode and I hope this will explain a lot of what has occurred in the other episodes. As I have written at the beginning...
Comments27/10/2016 #34 Pamela 🐝 Williams#30 Stay tuned Deb. Although I wouldn't call it a happy ending, life is set right, as best it can in the circumstances under which my characters have been placed. Life is full of lessons, we are all tested and we all fail, but sometimes we don't, sometimes we find the path we can take and find peace, with ourselves, with others. "Give me the strength to accept the things I cannot change, change the things I can, and the wisdom to know the difference". My brother kept this posted on his refrigerator for decades, it was given to him at an AA meeting. The Serenity Prayer. When he passed it was the one thing I insisted be on his marker: Granted Serenity, along with a picture of his cat of course..25/10/2016 #31 🐝 Fatima WilliamsDear @Pamela 🐝 Williams this was very emotional and a nail-biter to read. I started reading with a smile and all the characters fell into place and I was still wondering why Running deer hated Nicanol after reading the birth part of the episode. Towards the end I was thinking OMG what is this stubborn child going to do and as I wanted my guesses to be wrong . They were not only right but also claimed two lives instead of what I thought as one.
The loss of a loved one can create such negative feelings and behavior especially when the death is not natural and man-made. I now see why she is treated this way and wonder if Running deer will ever understand that Nicanol has realized the consequences of her action.
Brilliant fantabulous story writing. This one will definitely never cease from my memory.
#Youareawesome #Lovedit #PamelaRocks :)25/10/2016 #30 Deb 🐝 Helfrich#25 That's what we get in real life. The current imperfect amalgamation of many, many past actions and thoughts. Almost all of which will stay hidden...
But, of course, the question is - even when meanness is justified in some sense by a prior interaction - is it acceptable?
I have held grudges for things unable to be uttered in the same sentence as losing a child. And it is inevitable that there will be individuals who we struggle to get along with - but the poisoning of the clan/community that is an entirely different level of grudge and perhaps one to really be alert for. One person rarely has much of a chance against systemic injustice.25/10/2016 #25 Pamela 🐝 Williams#18 Ah, so you kept them in reverse timeline! Do you see now why that makes sense? To me it had to be written that way, you had to think about the characters and their actions until this episode and everything fell into place. To me it imbued the story with raw emotion.25/10/2016 #23 Pamela 🐝 Williams#5 I actually tire myself out once I start writing, I can't stop. I sat in a coffee shop Saturday, working on the story and before I knew it four hours had passed. They kicked me out because they wanted to close so I went to one of my favorite diners, had a Western Omelet and worked for another hour. I think I got a bit obsessed. You think?25/10/2016 #21 Pamela 🐝 Williams#8 thank you my friend! It was really hard to write. I got attached to my characters. I want to eventually do a Prequel and tell the full story of Friend of the Wolf and Morning Dove. Something is telling me that needs to come first. When I finish the final chapter you'll see that. Yes, it's already in my head. Wish I could write it as fast as the story comes to me. I could write a novel in a weekend. :-)25/10/2016 #18 Deb 🐝 Helfrich#15 It is a definite absolutely love filled set of wows. I am glad I waited in order to read them together. I actually thought I would finish them last night, but I decided to let the first five sink in. I hoped you would be able to see the pattern in my relevanting. I didn't even want to scroll and see any comments my first time through. Excited for the finale!!!
- Producer09/10/2016The Strengthening - Episode 7Welcome to the continuing fictional saga about the life of a young female Indian warrior. The story is told with each episode moving back in time. This backward movement was chosen for a specific purpose to have the reader ask the question; why?...
Comments10/10/2016 #11 Pamela 🐝 Williams#9 Why thank you Ms Williams! I have to admit, this has been fun. Other than school assignments this is the first time I've ever taken a stab a fiction. There is a lot of symbolism in the story that I can relate to my own life. But most important of all it's been fun entertaining everyone.10/10/2016 #9 🐝 Fatima WilliamsFantabuloustic story You had me glued in 🤗🤗🤗🤗 absolutely in love with the character. Great story telling. It talks much about how we face adversities in our own life.@Pamela 🐝 Williams View moreFantabuloustic story You had me glued in 🤗🤗🤗🤗 absolutely in love with the character. Great story telling. It talks much about how we face adversities in our own life.@Pamela 🐝 Williams #Yourock Close10/10/2016 #8 Pamela 🐝 Williams#7 Ben, at the end of each episode is a list of the previous episodes in the order in which they should be read. I did that to make it easier or new readers to follow the story line in the order in which I wrote it. Does that help. I can report to the Fiction hive which is not used much. I thought about doing that but hadn't decided.10/10/2016 #7 Ben PintoI think I want to start at the end of this, or should I say the prequel to the beginning or I really don't know. First of all, if this is going backwards will there be a hive, when you are done, Pamela, where you can repost this while story to? Just going to your profile page and looking back to the end, or beginning, brings a bee passing by so many other great articles and themes that it is dizzying.09/10/2016 #5 Pamela 🐝 Williams#4 Thanks David. I have considered a screenplay but wouldn't have the first idea how to write one, so a collaboration would work for me! I'm telling the highlights of the story, there is so much more that goes through this busy brain of mine, but I have to be realistic and keep it to a readable length! Glad you like the story David!09/10/2016 #4 David B. GrinbergKudos Pamela on your impressive storytelling and creative writing techniques. Have you introduced character dialogue into these stories? Perhaps we should collaborate on a screenplay or something? Let's take it to the next level. Very admirable, Pamela...admirable and impressive, indeed.09/10/2016 #3 Pamela 🐝 Williams#2 Wouldn't get a publisher for it Gert! Just ask @Deb 🐝 Helfrich about too much of a book being on the internet. BUT! Alas, I have a Prequel and a Sequel to the story swimming around in this brain of mine. Wait until tomorrow if you liked this one! I threw this one together this morning because I realized I needed a bridge between the one I wrote yesterday and the last one I published! :-) (Oh sorry for grammatical errors, like I said, this one came out fast and furious!)
- Producer10/10/2016The Emergence - Episode 8Welcome to the continuing fictional saga about the life of a young female Indian warrior. The story is told with each episode moving back in time. This backward movement was chosen for a specific purpose to have the reader ask the question; why?...
Comments10/10/2016 #13 🐝 Fatima Williams@Pamela 🐝 Williams The comment below was for the previous episode that I had clicked to read from here however I see that the comment has appeared here.
This story gets so interesting after each episode now we know why the Sakomasq treats Kisuhs this way or is there more to her rudeness . Can't wait Thank you for tagging me Loved it 🤗🤗💖💖10/10/2016 #11 Pamela 🐝 Williams#10 I'm really glad you like it Franci. In the next episode everything will fall into place. What I hope is everyone has a "Okay, NOW I get it" moment. I have an idea for the Prequel but I think I'll try to start at the beginning with that. As I told Dean, backwards was how this story came to me so I just went with it.10/10/2016 #9 Pamela 🐝 Williams#8 Netfliks and DVD's have done that to us!! My daughter is all about binge watching. I was always one that could read a chapter in a book, sit it down, come back a week later and never miss a step! Except of course anything to do with learning statistics...that was my nemesis! You can read it any way you want Dean. I just thought for social media this would be a fun way to do it. Plus it just came to me this way, My brain started at the end so my writing just followed along :-)10/10/2016 #7 Pamela 🐝 Williams#6 Okay Dean, if you must LOL! Of course I don't mind, not everyone likes to write in this way. I'll let you know when it's complete if you really want to read it. You don't have to you know! But I have had others say the exact same thing. Thanks for stopping by :-)10/10/2016 #6 Dean OwenI love the concept @Pamela 🐝 Williams but it's a bit too much for my brain to process. Would you mind terribly if I wait until you reach the first chapter, then I read the whole thing from front to back? It's like asking me to watch Star Trek Generations in reverse order. That would freak me out! :)
- Producer18/09/2016The Loss - Episode 6Welcome to the continuing fictional saga about the life of a young female Indian warrior. The story is told with each episode moving back in time. This backward movement was chosen for a specific purpose to have the reader ask the question; why?...
Comments20/09/2016 #19 Lisa 🐝 GallagherI haven't read this yet @Pamela 🐝 Williams and I shared it to my hive so I can. Today was hectic. Trying to get everything ready for our road travels on Thursday. Can't wait to read the latest. I swear, this should be made into a movie or mini-series because so far- it's just THAT good!!20/09/2016 #18 Pamela 🐝 Williams#17 I'm mulling it over right now. I know where I want to go but I don't want to go there too fast! The next episode is the first to stump me a little. Once I get past that I know where it's going. I'm glad you enjoyed it Franci! Have to tell you, I'm engrossed in the story and I'm the one that's writing it!
I've been sharing it on Twitter but I think this will be the last one shared there. If those reading it want to know what happens they're going to have to come to beBee. This is where Kisuhs Nicanol's lives :-)19/09/2016 #10 Donna-Luisa Eversley#7 I think the wife of the chief hates the young warrior because she is really the daughter of her husband.... Yup.. the young warrior 's mum was promised to another but in love with the chief.. they met one night before she got married and did it...yup, the chief was engaged to his wife and could not get out of it... That hate has grown because when the baby was born she thinks it's the chief's love child. Maybe the story will end with the chief and the warrior's mum talking about why they cannot be together....star crossed lovers..
- Producer30/08/2016The VisitWelcome to the continuing fictional saga about the life of a young female Indian warrior. The story is told with each episode moving farther back in time. This backward movement was chosen for a specific purpose to have the reader ask the...
Comments31/08/2016 #13 Pamela 🐝 Williams#5 I have heard of Mr Cooke! I love Native American art, especially if it is based on reality. These two artists I found by accident and loved the softness of Carpenter's expressions. The maiden with wolf depicted exactly how I wanted her to relate to the wolf. I had the please of having a wolf as a companion in my late teens/early twenties. Loved her, such beautiful animals and their eyes almost talk to you. Thanks for sharing Chas and for following my story!30/08/2016 #5 Chas ✌️ Wyatt@Pamela 🐝 Williams, I turned you on to a book, now, I'd like to let you know about an artist whose work you might like. He passed away in 2012, so, now his artwork is hard to find, but, he was a prominent artist with leanintree cards. He was an Oregon artist and all his paintings were well researched, so the details of the clothing on his Indian figures were based on authentic historical research. His name is Roger Cooke and his work was also featured in galleries in New Mexico, Scottsdale, Arizona, California and New York. Here are some links, just for the purpose of showing his work; like I said, it is now hard to find;
https://www.amazon.com/Princess-Indian-Roger-Cooke-Puzzle/dp/B005IHZRH630/08/2016 #4 Pamela 🐝 Williams#2 Okay, it was bugging me! There are now links on the last two posts that will lead you to the artists. :-) I do not like NOT giving credit and citing. Bad Form!! Couldn't go to sleep until I fixed it! :-) Jack Carpenter and Charles Frizzle are two fabulous Native American artists!30/08/2016 #3 Pamela 🐝 Williams#2 I was actually just thinking about that . I was providing credit early on and have forgotten to do so in the last few. Bad Bad Me! I will rectify that tomorrow. I just do image searches based on what I'm looking for. Most are 'public' but I still need to credit the source. I think I spend much more time looking for appropriate images that I do writing :-)
- Producer05/07/2016The Hunt Prequel to The Ascent Welcome to the continuing fictional saga about the life of a young female Indian warrior. The story is told with each episode moving...
Comments20/07/2016 #24 Pamela 🐝 WilliamsSo sorry I didn't thank you for the wonderful compliment Lisa. I don't know about brilliant but I sure am enjoying the journey. I can't thank many of the writers I've met that have encouraged me and brought me out of my writer shell. It is not something I would have considered a year ago and now I can't imagine a day without writing something. This series is coming to me in snippets. The first two just flowed with little thought and now I find myself developing the story in my mind constantly. I think my readers are in for a surprise as we move back in time and the story unfolds. All the Whys come to light and opinions will change. Thank you Lisa for reading, you're one of the writers that has been such a wonderful encouragement. #2207/07/2016 #18 Pamela 🐝 WilliamsI'm working on the next two Adam and @Dean Owen. Was just supposed to be one but it was getting to be too long so I'm splitting it. . #17 So, the first one had the question; Why was she on the cliff, and the second I'm seeing as what led to the animosity of the matron? That question takes more than one chapter to tell.06/07/2016 #14 Adam Readcontinued...
This is the woman...and these are the eyes that I see peering out through the shadows of the Ancient Text. From Genesis all the way to Revelations, she is there...waiting to be known by her Children...and waiting for her story to be told. And after more than 6,000 years of undying love for David, she has finally caught the attention of a son of hers known as Ami, whose name means, "My People." He is the one...or so she hopes...who may finally find a way to tell the true story that has been hidden for so long and bring peace between the people of Dah-Is Nah-Id, from which David came, and the people of Al'eh-oh, from which Rachel comes.06/07/2016 #13 Adam Read#9 Here is the kind of warrior she is, Pamela L. Williams: "It was to a catastrophically devastated, terrified, and now furious young man that Rachel now chose to wed in marriage. Knowing what a brilliant and happy little boy he was before his mother fell to her death, she would never be able to live with herself if she walked away from him now. Despite the begging and pleading from her father not to choose David for a husband, who now had one purpose in life which was to become the most powerful creature in the universe, there was no changing her mind, which terrified her own mother as well. The wedding day came, and the room was terribly tense, for no one in either of their cultures had ever seen anything like this. While some have assumed that the simple phrase she uttered as a wedding vow came from some of the greatest warriors ever known, it was Rachel who became the revered and respected in time by her own people as she stood with undaunted stare into her soon to be husband's eyes and uttered the words, "Semper Fidelis." No one in her culture had ever taken such a fearless step towards marrying someone everyone else would have run from. And as the years began to pass, she became known for her ferocious tenacity and volatile love that could only be matched by such a horribly wounded soulmate. Inseparable since infants, there would be an eternity of commitment from this woman who knew that in order for her to survive, paradise would have to be redesigned."
- Producer03/07/2016The AscentThe Beginning of the EndWelcome to the continuing fictional saga about the life of a young female Indian warrior. The story is told with each episode moving back in time. This backward movement was chosen for a specific purpose to have the reader...
Comments31/08/2016 #33 🐝 Fatima Williams@Pamela 🐝 Williams I love it you totally had me glued in . An enthralling story and it had me pinned to the edge of my seat. I love the way you bring out the mystery in her and through this episode you give us all the courage to live on, even if our hopes are low.
" She could finally rest under the warm rays of the sun" is way of telling the audience once you cross those obstacles in life you will find the warmth of the sun that we all long for !
🤗🤗🤗🤗I'm off to Episode 2 (winks)05/07/2016 #32 Donna-Luisa EversleyShe climbed to the peak to end it all at the top...while being hunted. Quite an interesting story, with many stories within her story. You have captured the play of emotions nicely @Pamela 🐝 Williams View moreShe climbed to the peak to end it all at the top...while being hunted. Quite an interesting story, with many stories within her story. You have captured the play of emotions nicely @Pamela 🐝 Williams! Bravo... Close05/07/2016 #28 Randy KehoExtremely well crafted @Pamela 🐝 Williams .Very vivid and engaging. I fully expected her fate to be revealed -- but it wasn't. At first, I was disappointed. I was forced to think for myself (Damn it!). But, I think that how we respond to the story's non-conclusion reveals how we look at life. Is the cup half full or half empty? Did she live or die? Had she gone just a little too far, and, although she appears to have chosen life, was it now out of reach? We're forced to contemplate the various lessons that can be gleaned from the story. A superb job! Okay, now give it to me straight. Did she live or die? Inquiring minds want to know (Come on, it's just you and me, you can tell me). I guess you can always come back to the moment at hand after the prequel. Please do. Thanks for the story -- I think?05/07/2016 #27 Chas ✌️ Wyatt@Pamela 🐝 Williams, I love this story. You have woven a tale full of mystery and by leaving some details out, I can tell by the comments, that readers are filling in their own conclusions from their perspective without seeing the details revealed. The mystery is what makes this a beautiful story; you provide more questions than answers and don't draw the story to a conclusion- I love this! What is the characters motives? Is she seeking to fly, or fall? It reminds me of some actual life experiences. Once I had climbed up a narrow canyon in southern Utah and as I rose in elevation there was snow and ice packed along the sides of the canyon with a stream flowing underneath the ice pack. When I had climbed as far as I could go because of the sheer narrow walls of the canyon denying any further ascent, there was a huge boulder wedged between the canyon walls about fifteen feet above me and about ten feet from the top of the mesa. The descent was much more treacherous and I couldn't follow the same path I used to climb up the canyon, at one point I came to a place where I had to make a decision; there was a bank of snow and ice on the opposite side of the canyon and the stream was flowing beneath me- I couldn't climb down and I had no way of knowing if the snow and ice would hold me, or if I would fall through- I gathered my courage and lept onto the bank of snow and ice, and fortunately, it held steadfast. The rest of the descent was without incident.
"If you don’t take risks, you’ll have a wasted soul." ~Drew Barrymore.
"I hugged safety close to my chest and kissed risk full on the lips." ~Betsy Cañas Garmon.05/07/2016 #26 Pamela 🐝 Williamsoh how my grandfather AND brother would have loved to sit for hours with you Adam! He called himself a fundamentalist but at the same time he didn't quite fit into that category. By the way, I added the Prequel; The Hunt - would love your perspective on that one. I'd love to see how it aligns with the Attachment Theory...this could get interesting! :-) . #2505/07/2016 #25 Adam Read#24 Hi Pamela. I didn't realize that was an option. If I knew which key to use to open the door, I would have started using it long a go. :). I have written extensively on this subject, but there is no point in publishing it if the intended audience (i.e., the church) won't read it. I can't mention any problem with the character of God, for example, because of how the church is taught to defend his scripted character. So on that, I have no choice but to remain silent. There are other problems, though, with the body language and posture of the text and even the construct of Heaven itself. (See my profile under "services offered" for a description of "paradise redefined." ) I also found that the authors do not understand the fundamentals of Attachment Theory or anything in particular about navigating trauma. The doctrine of original sin is instead substituted for this absence which then forces a punitive construct to the message rather than an interventional/therapeutic one. Once the punitive construct exists, it then forces the conversation of grace. As far as I can tell, the church's own interest in the study of mental health is actively undermining its own foundation, and I can't seem to gain any traction on these kinds of topics with theologians at all.05/07/2016 #22 Adam Read#20 Hi @Pamela 🐝 Williams. I am actually the grandson of a Navy Chaplain myself, and for decades, I was convinced I was called to be a missionary. I have spent over five years now trying to bring up significant concerns about the architecture of the Bible to a very wide array of theologians. So, yes, we are good, but it appears I still have a long ways to go before the church understands what I am trying to say.05/07/2016 #21 Pamela 🐝 Williams#18 One more thing; I was talking about adding or taking from the text of the BIBLE, not my story. Again, a misunderstanding. When you spoke of God prior to "in the beginning' then my immediate thought was to jump on what my grandfather pounded in my head; "You don't not add to or take from the Word of God" I'm so sorry you thought I was coming at you! I feel horrible for that! I thought your comments were well presented, thoughtful, and very close to the 'Prequel".05/07/2016 #20 Pamela 🐝 WilliamsDo not apologize @Adam Read! I'm sorry if I made you feel like I was attacking your response. You stated your opinion and in a way it does hint at the character. Just not the type of sacrifice you associate with Rachel. I am the granddaughter of a minister and have some pretty strong opinions on Christianity myself . But I try never to stop others from having their own thoughts and beliefs. I truly appreciate your reading and commenting. The Mother of Eden is just the name of the site where I found the image and it was actually about a natural birth from what I quickly read. I just like the photo; Woman on a Cliff :-) Please always feel free to share your thoughts. I don't have to agree with the philosophy and I may debate them a little, but their yours and as long as they aren't attacking me (which I hope I did not do in return) I'm good with all comments. So are we good??#1804/07/2016 #18 Adam ReadI must apologize, @Pamela 🐝 Williams. The first thing I read on your post was the title of the image from wordpress (mother of eden). This evoked a Biblical response which may have not been what you intended in your own writing. When I read your story, one interpretation could have been that she was contemplating suicide, as this sentence led me to believe: "Tears welled in her eyes at the thought she would never know how it felt to belong; to have her difference accepted." So, what ensued in my mind was a combination of your story and the title of the image, which was where I thought the story I suggested was an acceptable interpretation. When you then asked about the rule in the Bible about not adding or subtracting to the narrative, it caught me by surprise because I thought that was what you were already doing. Regardless, I would enjoy reading the next part of the story, whether it is a prequel or a sequel. Kind regards.04/07/2016 #17 Adam Read#16 Hi @Pamela 🐝 Williams. I assume sacrifices are strategic, whether or not they are voluntary or forced is perhaps another matter, If we assume the Bible is complete, then we run into the problem that much of the Text appears to be defensively written, but again, that is a matter of my interpretation. If we assume that it is incomplete, then we are charged with the task of at least attempting to fill in the missing pieces.04/07/2016 #16 Pamela 🐝 WilliamsI do want to add something Adam; you assume that sacrifices are voluntary? As for 'prior' to the Old Testament; what about the command; not to add to or take from the text? Isn't discussing events prior to "in the beginning' adding to what is supposed to be complete? I also consider this; the Bible was re-written, has been several times. The King James version for example and all with one fatal flaw; these edits were by human beings. It's like our own constitution; so full of freedoms and yet so open to interpretation by the philosophies of those in power at any given time. In the age when Rachel was to have lived a woman's place was motherhood, wifehood, etc. For a woman to be held in high esteem within the community meant being 'mother' to all. Much like a First Lady; there are as many expectations for her role as there are for the President. The choice she made was being married to him, the rest was a requirement of the position. Doesn't mean she sacrifices gladly.
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Fiction is the classification for any story created in the imagination rather than based strictly on history or fact. Fiction can be expressed in a variety of formats, including writings, live performances, films, television programs, video games, and role-playing games, though the term originally and most commonly refers to the major narrative forms of literature (see literary fiction), including the novel, novella, short story, and play.